Wow, no WOW! I found your story amazing. I loved the mix of Rice's ideas and a modern sitting-imagine, a safe place to go as far as your kink will take you! I fantasize about going out in public with my master/lover's collar on, but realize that, unless we go to a Con, it will probably never happen, not the way I picture it. I wish you had left it with potential--i. e., with Alexis alive and able to have more adventures, but I loved the rest!
That said, if you were sincere in your reply, and would like help with grammar/punctuation to make it as good as the ideas, I would be happy to volunteer. Your story was SO good, but I am easily distracted by grammatical errors (my college's history department had serious grammar requirements: one instructor, on take-home assignments, would take a full letter grade per error; it made me hyper-vigilant) and that did take away a little. You have awesome ideas, which I certainly couldn't have come up with, and most of your grammar, etc. was spot on-I would love to have a chance to make it perfect. Call it my way of contributing to the arts.
Please, walk away with the thought that your story rocked, not any criticism. If you are interested in the other let me know by PM.

Thank you for great story!