You had a Creative Writing Instructor? [envy] Having only finished school last year, I spent the time doing analytical and persuasive writing, since that was the entire curriculum of English. There WAS no Creative Writing! IMHO, I think I'm doing pretty well considering the last creative writing I did was really in Year 7-8.
And I like that sentence I'll try to take this onboard, although if I spent that much on every sentence, I wouldn't get anything done in the five-six pages I write per chapter (can anyone say Wheel of Time?)
I won't go and re-write the first 8 chapters I've released, but I will go over 10 and change a few things I'm tempted to release 9 tonight; just read over it and got myself into quite a state.

Any feedback on the last few chapters?! Or is it too long, and almost no-one actually reads the entire thing?