Razor's Character building course 401

[Razor7826]

I've gotten a lot of stuff done over the past week. A new Bad End chapter and Queen of Sorrow's Falls posted to the library, two more stories fully drafted but in need of a few editing passes, and two or three more that are about 80% done. Plenty (dozens) that are much smaller %s that may never lead anywhere productive.

[Mad Lews]

Howdy Razor,
Have seen this and will give it some proper attention as time permits. Seems like you've been busy, keep up the good work.
Mad Lews

[Mad Lews]

OK Razor,

We (you) are going play with these two for a while so lets not make Juliana that easy.
How about we cut off the last 280 odd words and leave the professor a bit frustrated.(just a touch of a rewrite) Next we switch to a more feminine perspective that will end in Julia's shocked refusal and flight from the dinner date. Start with her enthusiastic hopes for the evening, her growing concerns as he makes his move and end with her utter dismay.

Use her character sketch to do this and expose more of her character as you develop the theme.

Yes you're right we'll need to add to the begining too but we'll get to that in time as the characters come more sharply into focus.

Till then

Mad Lews