This is certainly not my kind of story, as I am a female submissive.
But i loved it!

You manage to capture the spirit of the his submission I think. Keep at it.

On the downside, you did get your pronouns wrong a few times, which was a bit confusing.
And (having tasted the cane myself) the number of strokes does sound excessive. You hero's ass would raw and bleeding by lunchtime.

Anne