It be time for a meager helping of Dean the Mean. No, I've not much to say that hasn't been said already. Mr Lews covered me own complaints pretty damned well, damn his eyes. Still, I'll poke yer arsehole with me dagger a time or two.

The Baskerville family had really let their dogs go over the last few years.

Get rid of sophomoric terms like this. "Really" is best left to dialog and other words that should have a "ue" ending. That's a bad joke. Anyway, "really" is a crap-assed modifier. So get rid of it. It's like using "just" all the time to modify things. Yeah, it's okay in dailogue (it really should have that "ue" ending) but it's crap in story telling.

Also, I dislike terms like "cunt lips". I don't know if the author you are ghosting uses such terms. I can tell you that every asshole who thinks he is a writers uses them to death. Take Mad, for instance. That asshole uses all sorts of unsavory terms. On the other hand, Lews is far more graceful. Seriously, there are stories such terms will work well in and stories where it won't. Try not to be like everyone else with such terms - be more creative with your words...as you are with your stories.

Otherwise, I was rather amused at the story. It flowed pretty well and, other than the pirate voice being a bit unconvincing (non-standard pirate), it was enjoyable. That is, I like the beat, I'll give it a 38.

This is a far better stab than you had been making on the lower levels, I might add. It looks like the miscreants down there helped out a bit. I wish I could have been of more service but, fuck me, I can't even service myself.


I made me laugh with "non-standard pirate". Man, that's funny...in a lame way.