Very good ---but you could have been a bit more discriptive about him ---did he have a dimple on his chin---what did he smell like ----were his eyes covered with bushy eyebrows ---did he have a beard or was he clean shaven--etc---theses things are important to see when you write about a subject ---- and help make your readers actually see the subject---it will not be used in all stories ----but it is helpful when you can if nessary get very descriptive ----not only about looks but ---taste ---smell ---his voice ---did he have a deep voice that made you melt when you heard his southren draw? --I hope you can see how these exercises will help you later.

but this was a good start do not get discouraged I will PM you your next exercise.----