But make sure the title reflects the overall story.


On a side note I like the story and have been following it. But it could be a little more extreem.
It is a little on the vinela side at the moment.
Consider doing something permentant. Some thing shocking.
besides the tipicaly big boobs a tatoo or branding her. Putting rings in the nipples, yawn.

Make her submision more perment. have her sign over her life to Kelly sign a power of attorney or fake her death then remove her identity. make her a non person. Remove her fingerprints, alter her aperence. Then after the school When kelly is done with her she can sell her to white slavers


just a thought like the story and will continue to follow it
BBeale