Hi, I'm new and new to writing so I would appreciate feedback on my story 'Jennifer'
Hi, I'm new and new to writing so I would appreciate feedback on my story 'Jennifer'
... as soon as I read it, I'll be happy to let you know how I feel about it. Pay attention to your feedback page.
It's in the blood...
I am discovering features on this great site as I go.I've found the reviews and thank you.
... just doing my job, Ma'am. Just doing my job.![]()
It's in the blood...
Beautifully written indeed!
We particularly liked the bit with Sylvia: we belong, you see, to the school of pornographic theory - pertaining to texts as well as to art - which holds that that the number of participants -- active or pasive -- people musst be odd. Thus one is OK (for a while) and you terat that beautifully (the several lovely masturbation bits), three is great (hence Sylvia), five requires some mastery (which you certainly seem to have), and with seven ... we don't know. The Divine Marquis could pull off seven, but then he was a genius, wasn't he?
In Part Two, will there be a party?
With much admiration,
Erika von KZ
Erika,
what nice things to say.![]()
Part 2 has been sent and part 3 is almost done. You are giving me wicked ideas.![]()
Looking forward to Part Two (couldn't find it yet).
And, Jennifer, what a compliment: "You are giving me wicked ideas".
We love perverting nice people like you.
Erika & Heinz
Part 2 will appear when the site is updated, I guess. I'm up to Part 5 and erika, you did give me wicked ideas!![]()
First now do we see that the message icon we thought was a yawn (eyes closed, mouth open, I mean...) officially translates as "red face."
We are very fond of red faces and other parts of the anatomy.
E&H
It was a blushOriginally posted by ErikavonKZ
First now do we see that the message icon we thought was a yawn (eyes closed, mouth open, I mean...) officially translates as "red face."
We are very fond of red faces and other parts of the anatomy.
E&H![]()
Nothing more.
Have I got the smilie lore wrong?![]()
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I try with what is available
(That's the story of my life)
Why "Nothing more"? Is there anything more delightful than a blush on a woman's face?
Well, yes, maybe. And no, there isn't: having made a pervert BLUSH, that's something to cherish.
You sent me back to that great Anastassja site: several - all?- of the Frollo drawings illustrate our fantasy involving cruel ladies running brothels.
Want a sample?
Erika
PleaseOriginally posted by ErikavonKZ
Why "Nothing more"? Is there anything more delightful than a blush on a woman's face?
Well, yes, maybe. And no, there isn't: having made a pervert BLUSH, that's something to cherish.
You sent me back to that great Anastassja site: several - all?- of the Frollo drawings illustrate our fantasy involving cruel ladies running brothels.
Want a sample?
Erika
(Part 2 has been posted and I've sent Part 3 so it should be up in a few days - Part 3 is harder)
The sitting lady in Leodom04 is surely a client.
In 16. we believe we see a madam punishing a toy, perhaps because the toy misbehaved. Or is this entertainment on the small stage in the bar? What do you think?
In Leodom26 a madam instructs a toy selected by two clients, probably watching: "... or else," the admonition ends, and the madam winks at the clients. Needless to say, the madam just loves it and will probably be watching how the clients enjoy their beautiful prey.
Erika & Heinz
Last edited by ErikavonKZ; 11-16-2002 at 01:27 PM.
Perhaops one can post only one image with each message.
Third and last sample for public display (we do have some up our sleaveless tank-top).
Yumm!![]()
I am a shameless feedback slut, I admit it. I love the feedback and reviews this story has generated.I feel this could rather become addictive
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I know it's not perfect, I never expected it to me and I'm overhwlemed by the offers to assist.It's all terribly nice.
Thank you![]()
More parts coming
Great story, Jennifer.
May i ask what the "nylon" part of your name means?
ErikavonKZ, love those drawings![]()
I love those drawings, too! That second one is giving me some wonderful ideas ... I can't think of anywhere in this flat where my subs' arms could be over her head that high. Hmmm, I think I'm going off to the hardware store - again! Wait - how about over the top of a door? She'd have to face the door, one breast on each side of it, rope on the door handle, under her crotch, me behind her, with a crop ... Oh yes, that could work![]()
My hobby? Creating new methods of torture ....
Oh good, just what you needed, another way of tying me up ... maybe you guys on the forum could stop coming up with new ideas? She's pretty creative all by herself.
Quiet, slut!
You know you love it when I try new things on you. Tell you what. On Friday, I'll try this out on you. Think you can wait that long? think about it every day; imagine what it's gonna feel like.
Anticipation can be a sweet torture all by itself.
My hobby? Creating new methods of torture ....
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