I've just published my first story here on this site, it's called "A Mistress/slave Beautiful Relationship". It was originally written in Spanish, so maybe the translation to English is not all that good.

Anyway, I wanted to know what you thought of it, if there's any grammar or edition I could do to it so it would be more fluent to read. I want to know what you liked and didn't like and if you'd be willing for a second part. In general, I'd like to hear anything you like to say about it so I can improve my writing and the stories.

You can find it here: http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/s...p?storyid=1979

THANKS IN ADVANCE!!