Proof-reading help humbly requested

Hi all,

I hope this is the right forum for this, but I'd like someone to proof-read a story I have just written before I submit it to the BDSM library. Despite my moniker, I am a fairly poor writer (I warn you now), but in the spirit of practice making perfect, I have written another story.

It contains a great deal of sex, some M/f(+) and F/m domination, and probably not enough characterisation. But if anyone is willing to read it and make constructive suggestions (naturally I'm not about to rewrite the whole story, but I am happy to take any and all suggestions on board) to help me out, I would be most grateful. It's about 10,000 words, and it's a 100kb PDF that I can e-mail to anyone who is willing to assist.

Thanks in advance!

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Originally Posted by somewriter

Hi all,

I hope this is the right forum for this, but I'd like someone to proof-read a story I have just written before I submit it to the BDSM library. Despite my moniker, I am a fairly poor writer (I warn you now), but in the spirit of practice making perfect, I have written another story.

It contains a great deal of sex, some M/f(+) and F/m domination, and probably not enough characterisation. But if anyone is willing to read it and make constructive suggestions (naturally I'm not about to rewrite the whole story, but I am happy to take any and all suggestions on board) to help me out, I would be most grateful. It's about 10,000 words, and it's a 100kb PDF that I can e-mail to anyone who is willing to assist.

Thanks in advance!

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Sure, my email is capriquarius@gmail.com :)

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Originally Posted by somewriter

Hi all,

I hope this is the right forum for this, but I'd like someone to proof-read a story I have just written before I submit it to the BDSM library. Despite my moniker, I am a fairly poor writer (I warn you now), but in the spirit of practice making perfect, I have written another story.

It contains a great deal of sex, some M/f(+) and F/m domination, and probably not enough characterisation. But if anyone is willing to read it and make constructive suggestions (naturally I'm not about to rewrite the whole story, but I am happy to take any and all suggestions on board) to help me out, I would be most grateful. It's about 10,000 words, and it's a 100kb PDF that I can e-mail to anyone who is willing to assist.

Thanks in advance!

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If you've written it in Word format, just send it to me at skullchaser@yahoo.com and I'll turn on "Track Edits". You can keep the changes you like and skip the ones you don't.

And you're right - practice makes perfect! Maybe in a few years you'll come back to the story and decide to completely redo it into a masterpiece!

please email to: andy@cokera.zzn.com

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Originally Posted by somewriter

Hi all,

I hope this is the right forum for this, but I'd like someone to proof-read a story I have just written before I submit it to the BDSM library. Despite my moniker, I am a fairly poor writer (I warn you now), but in the spirit of practice making perfect, I have written another story.

It contains a great deal of sex, some M/f(+) and F/m domination, and probably not enough characterisation. But if anyone is willing to read it and make constructive suggestions (naturally I'm not about to rewrite the whole story, but I am happy to take any and all suggestions on board) to help me out, I would be most grateful. It's about 10,000 words, and it's a 100kb PDF that I can e-mail to anyone who is willing to assist.

Thanks in advance!

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Hi, I will gladly read it for you. I write myself but only for friends and they seem to think i have an eye for these things. You can send it to me at sean_daughton@hotmail.com. I'll give you an honest opinion and any advice I think may help!
SEAN

As you can see above, I do have somewhat dubious credentials. I love to edit people's work so if you haven't found someone yet, send me a private pm or else email me at the address listed on my profile.

I would not mind reading your story. As a matter of fact, I am rather sure I would enjoy it. You can send it to me at payton_naomi_kaili@yahoo.com. I will try to be as helpful as I can and I am not one of those reviewer's who, shall we say shows very littleetiqiette and even less home training.
Still crazy and proud of it !
cRicKeTTe :-[

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Originally Posted by somewriter

Hi all,

I hope this is the right forum for this, but I'd like someone to proof-read a story I have just written before I submit it to the BDSM library. Despite my moniker, I am a fairly poor writer (I warn you now), but in the spirit of practice making perfect, I have written another story.

It contains a great deal of sex, some M/f(+) and F/m domination, and probably not enough characterisation. But if anyone is willing to read it and make constructive suggestions (naturally I'm not about to rewrite the whole story, but I am happy to take any and all suggestions on board) to help me out, I would be most grateful. It's about 10,000 words, and it's a 100kb PDF that I can e-mail to anyone who is willing to assist.

Thanks in advance!

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